Friday Fictioneers – In Hiding

This image belongs to Anshu Bhojnagarwala.

 

This is a submission for Friday Fictioneers, a challenge to write a 100 word story based on the photo prompt. It’s a lot harder than I remembered, but I got there eventually.

“May? Are you in here?”

After a pause, the music classroom door closed.

Nestled under the piano, she tucked her costume skirt over her feet. The show would go on without her. She didn’t care if they were angry. The last exam was finished, and she wouldn’t see her fellow students again.

There was no mum or dad waiting in the audience to watch her.

A folded flyer for A Midsummer’s Night Dream propped up a stool leg.

She thought of Alice, proudly waving the flyer, proclaiming her big sister was a fairy.

May reluctantly left her hiding place.

60 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – In Hiding

    • I struggled to make the ending a bit less ambiguous. The wordcount was a challenge for me. I think I used too many words setting the scene – the flyer, the costume, the exam, and then didn’t have enough for a more direct ending.

  1. You achieve such a lot of emotion with your few available words. I can really see her wrestling with her emotions. Can’t help feeling she has something left to keep her showing up. A lovely story.

  2. I can imagine the emotions May was feeling, that drove her to hide under the piano. You evoked them well. Plus, it’s a lovely oblique take on the prompt, taking the physical inspiration from the piano, and the emotional from the sorry state of the instrument. Clever and imaginative writing!

    • Thanks, I was going to finish the story with her still under the piano, but it didn’t feel right. It took me a while to think of something that would motivate her to come out.

  3. Sometimes, it is the most difficult moments in our lives that force us to push our boundaries and achieve our goals! Sad story but the good part is she has her sister and that will probably be her biggest motivator for the future.

    • I always used to cringe as a teenager when someone used to tell me I needed to expand my comfort zone, but it’s so true that doing those things makes it easier further down the line.

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