Friday Fictioneers -The Consolation Prize

Photo Credit – Dale Rogerson

This is a 100 word story for Friday Fictioneers. Please follow the link to find the rules and to look at other 100 word stories. 

Candy pink sky fades to indigo. You knock on my door at exactly six.

I can’t help but see us, shadow backlit by fairground lights, reflected in the abundant chrome, in the eyes of the vendor who implores you to take one more chance to win me a prize.

No luck for you, and no stuffed creature for me. Consolation comes from following the scent of onions and doughnuts to purveyors of deep-fried delights.

You offer to share.

Lips coated in oily cinnamon-sugar, we kiss for the first time.

At home, I blame red cheeks on chill October air.

43 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers -The Consolation Prize

  1. I was impressed with your first word “Candy”. The perfect choice for a sweet story. The precision of that choice made me look twice at “following the scent of onions and doughnuts.” You certainly get that combination at a fairground, but whether it’s pleasant is debatable. I wondered whether your objective was to just add a little doubt about the otherwise delicious emotional experience of the youngsters?
    Very good write in all events. Kudos!

    • Thank you, sometimes I forget to includes sensory description in my usual writing, but reading other 100 word stories are a great reminder of how you can include it.

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